No Shy to Show

[boyhoangda]

Cái topic này để tụi em show những bài viết mà tụi em thấy ưng ý, hay có đầu tư. Chủ để có thể quanh em như về những người thân, về suy nghĩ của bản thân hay đơn giản là những bài tập trên lớp mà em cảm thấy thích thú. Post lên để mọi người cùng góp ý và học hỏi. Nhất là lớp sau học hỏi lớp trước. Anh sẽ xoá tất cả các bài có nội dung ném đá nên cứ yên tâm mà post nhé. Mọi người cần xem việc này là một việc học nghiêm túc, mọi góp ý cần phải đứng đắng. Muốn đùa thì qua bên buôn chuyện trá hình các kiểu mà chém nhé :D

Ai xung phong đầu tiên nào :D

[boyhoangda]

Vậy anh mở hàng nhé, đây là bản chưa sửa, và nói chung là có rất nhiều lỗi, thử tìm xem nhé :X

Topic:

Tell me all about yourself. What are two important things to you?



If you ask me: “What’s your favorite color?” my answer just can be “Black” Why’s that? I will tell you because I found that I can trust you, to me, you are not only a teacher but also a friend. But, first of all, let me introduce about myself.
My name is Quyen which is very special to me. Because, in Vietnam, I may be the only boy have this name because it is often named for a girl. Therefore, if there is any one asks me about my name, I have to answer at least twice or write it down. I asked my mother why they had named me like that; my mother said that: “You were named by a family’s friend when he got drunk. If you want, you can change it.” However, I could not find another name for me, I am Quyen, my family and friends have called me like that since the day I was born. And it is a present. I was born on 4th July 1989, the independent day of USA, so, on my birthday, there are many people in the world cheer with me.
I grew up in a poor village which is very beautiful with large rice fields and small hills. My family has 6 members: my parents, my two sisters, my brother and I. When I was 4 years old, my family went bankruptcy. My parents had to sell our house, the only value thing; my brothers and I moved to live with my grandparents. At the first night I lived far mother, no matter how my brother encouraged me, I cried so much, I cried for the last time I cry. Since then, I have growth up in love of brotherhood and neighborhood, and I knew that I did not have a right to make them feel disappointed about me. I am still a sensitive boy, I can be hurt easily. But nobody can recognize that, because I lived after a mask. When I feel sad, I come to my best friend, darkness, who always sits beside me, keep silent, listen to me, and sympathize with me. That’s why I say that Black is my favorite color.
Sometime, I wonder who I am. In my CV, there is no place for bad result. I tried to study as much as possible; my friend said to me that “You will be crazy when you graduate”. But that not what I really want. I love literary but I did not think that I can live on it. I have a private blog that I can write any things I like and I write for myself. When my roommates went to bed, I come to my blog, or I become myself, I am truthful with myself. I write about everybody around me, from my close friends, my family, my teachers to a new friend and how I felt. If there is any blogger read my blog, they may think that I am a boring, lonely boy not a funny and talkative boy as my friends might think. I often read long fictions and love stories. I feel moved by them and I wish I could have a beautiful love like that. However, I am always a loser in love.
Therefore, I cannot remember how many times I seat in darkness and enjoy stars. They made me feel calm down and peaceful. At that time, I talked to myself, I asked myself: “Who am I?”, “Is there anything good left?” or “What is important to me?” And there are two important things to me: family and friends. My family is always beside me. They supported me everything. My sister had to left school when she was just 7th graded as other children in my village at that time. However, my family has given me the best condition for studying up to now. My dad is my idol. He taught me to live for everybody around us, live for this life, live for this society. He said to me that: “Live is to give and forgive. Do anything that you think it is good for everybody”. He is also a person like that. In a program on VTV3, they called him as “The last musketeer who keeps the ancient castle of folk-song” My mother took care me for anything with all of her love. She always stands after each of my successes. All in all, my family is a save nest for me, a place for me to come back when I fail and my power to go on. My friends are also very important, especially when I live far from my home. They help me out of difficulties in life. We often share happiness as well as sadness together. We feel stronger when we work together, feel warm when we share our homesick, feel worry when anyone of us have sadness…When our family cannot take care of us, we come together and become a family. I love them for good. So, if I have to live without any of them, family and friends, I wonder how I can be myself of today.
Finally, I really do not know who I am, so I cannot tell you all about myself, there is just a little bit about me. I just know that I am living for people whom I love and for who love me, believe in me. I will try and still try to be a good child, a good friend because I own them too much. I also hope that there is a day I can say that: “My favorite color is pink”

:ch006::ch006::ch006::ch006:

[antichi999]

Em có bài writing này, em viết còn rất kém, mọi người xem qua rồi chỉ cho em với nhé! Tks a lot!
Writing: Which the culture in your country has changed in the last 50 years. What do you think about this change.

In the last 50 years, my country has many changed about customs and traditional. First, clothing customs have become less tight, in the past, student had to wear a uniform to school, now they can go to school in jeans, T-shirt or short skirt. The second is in musical tastes, my mother said, when she was young, she only listened to classical music, for example "Cai Luong", "Cheo", "Quan ho"... But by the time, there are many kinds of music, hiphop, rock, R&B... Moreover, dating customs has changed alot, in the past, It was taboo to kiss or hug lover in public, but today It's OK for couples to kiss or hug in public. Shortly, there are many changes, and my motto is "Out with the old, in with the new", because I think changes can make a better life for people!

[boyhoangda]

Em có bài writing này, em viết còn rất kém, mọi người xem qua rồi chỉ cho em với nhé! Tks a lot!
Writing: Which the culture in your country has changed in the last 50 years. What do you think about this change.

In the last 50 years, my country has many changed about customs and traditional. First, clothing customs have become less tight, in the past, student had to wear a uniform to school, now they can go to school in jeans, T-shirt or short skirt. The second is in musical tastes, my mother said, when she was young, she only listened to classical music, for example "Cai Luong", "Cheo", "Quan ho"... But by the time, there are many kinds of music, hiphop, rock, R&B... Moreover, dating customs has changed alot, in the past, It was taboo to kiss or hug lover in public, but today It's OK for couples to kiss or hug in public. Shortly, there are many changes, and my motto is "Out with the old, in with the new", because I think changes can make a better life for people!

Interesting :D

[antichi999]

Anh ơi thế sửa những cái kia ntn ạ?

[boyhoangda]

Thử xem :D

[antichi999]

In my opinion: less tight -> less modest. alot -> a lot (cái này là lỗi soạn thảo :|) còn cái shortly thì sao lại ko được nhỉ?

[boyhoangda]

Shortly theo ý của em là tóm lại, hay gần đây, hay trong một thời gian ngắn :D

[antichi999]

Dạ tóm lại :| kiểu như "in summary" ý

[boyhoangda]

Ờ, thế thì OK :D

[CĐN]

Today is my day off. I decided to go to Hanoi Temple of Literature without map. :ch014:

I went. In the way, I asked about more than 10 people but I hadn't still found the way. And I still went, still asked.:ch002: Sometimes, I seemed give up but I tried, because I thought that I could come there:smile01:. Finally, I came to Hanoi Temple of Literature:ech14:. At that time, I was very very happy:love10:. But when I opened my bag, I couldn't see my pocket, I fogot it at my home:((. So I couldn't buy ticket, I must come back home while I didn't know that I came here by what way ?!!:e3:

No money, no map, I must come back home. I was afraid of my motobike run out of petrol.:cry9:

And to keep calm:lookdown08:, I thought that I still had mobile phone to call someone help if what happen with me:)]. So I continued to ask the way.:-S

And now, I am writting this story. The story about : " Today was an off-day for me. " :ech14: I love my home.:ch003:

[boyhoangda]

Today is my day off. I decided to go to Hanoi Temple of Literature without map. :ch014:

I went. In the way, I asked about more than 10 people but I hadn't still found the way. And I still went, still asked.:ch002: Sometimes, I seemed give up but I tried, because I thought that I could come there:smile01:. Finally, I came to Hanoi Temple of Literature:ech14:. At that time, I was very very happy:love10:. But when I opened my bag, I couldn't see my pocket, I fogot it at my home (past perfect is better):((. So I couldn't buy ticket, I must come back home while I didn't know that I came here by what way(which is better) ?!!:e3:

No money, no map, I must come back home. I was afraid of my motobike run out of petrol.:cry9:

And to keep calm:lookdown08:, I thought that I still had mobile phone to call someone (for) help if what happen with (to) me:)]. So I continued to ask the way.:-S

And now, I am writting (one "t") this story. The story (is) about : " Today was an off-day for me. " :ech14: I love my home.:ch003:

Interesting, why did i miss this story??????

[CĐN]

Thank you so much ! This story is true ! Do you believe in me ? :)

[boyhoangda]

Of course, :D
when you want to go to somewhere on Sunday, I'm a free tour guide for you :D

[CĐN]

Thank you so much ! :)

[Con Ma Nhà Nguyễn]

Thinking about love. Have you ever asked "What is value of love?". I have a story about this answer.

Love and Time

Once upon a time, there was an island where all the feelings lived: Happiness, Sadness, Knowledge, and all of the others, including Love. One day it was announced to the feelings that the island would sink, so all constructed boats and left. Except for Love

Love was the only one who stayed. Love wanted to hold out until the last possible moment.

When the island had almost sunk, Love decided to ask for help.

Richness was passing by Love in a grand boat. Love said,
"Richness, can you take me with you?"
Richness answered, "No, I can't. There is a lot of gold and silver in my boat. There is no place here for you."

Love decided to ask Vanity who was also passing by in a beautiful vessel. "Vanity, please help me!"
"I can't help you, Love. You are all wet and might damage my boat," Vanity answered.

Sadness was close by so Love asked, "Sadness, let me go with you."
"Oh . . . Love, I am so sad that I need to be by myself!"

Happiness passed by Love, too, but she was so happy that she did not even hear when Love called her.

Suddenly, there was a voice, "Come, Love, I will take you." It was an elder. So blessed and overjoyed, Love even forgot to ask the elder where they were going. When they arrived at dry land, the elder went her own way. Realizing how much was owed the elder,

Love asked Knowledge, another elder, "Who Helped me?"
"It was Time," Knowledge answered.
"Time?" asked Love. "But why did Time help me?"
Knowledge smiled with deep wisdom and answered, "Because only Time is capable of understanding how valuable Love is."
(Who can give me some comment?)

[boyhoangda]

Thinking about love. Have you ever asked "What is value of love?". I have a story about this answer.

Love and Time

Once upon a time, there was an island where all the feelings lived: Happiness, Sadness, Knowledge, and all of the others, including Love. One day it was announced to the feelings that the island would sink, so all constructed boats and left. Except for Love

Love was the only one who stayed. Love wanted to hold out until the last possible moment.

When the island had almost sunk, Love decided to ask for help.

Richness was passing by Love in a grand boat. Love said,
"Richness, can you take me with you?"
Richness answered, "No, I can't. There is a lot of gold and silver in my boat. There is no place here for you."

Love decided to ask Vanity who was also passing by in a beautiful vessel. "Vanity, please help me!"
"I can't help you, Love. You are all wet and might damage my boat," Vanity answered.

Sadness was close by so Love asked, "Sadness, let me go with you."
"Oh . . . Love, I am so sad that I need to be by myself!"

Happiness passed by Love, too, but she was so happy that she did not even hear when Love called her.

Suddenly, there was a voice, "Come, Love, I will take you." It was an elder. So blessed and overjoyed, Love even forgot to ask the elder where they were going. When they arrived at dry land, the elder went her own way. Realizing how much was owed the elder,

Love asked Knowledge, another elder, "Who Helped me?"
"It was Time," Knowledge answered.
"Time?" asked Love. "But why did Time help me?"
Knowledge smiled with deep wisdom and answered, "Because only Time is capable of understanding how valuable Love is."
(Who can give me some comment?)

Interesting :D
I love this idea :x

[OathOfBlood]

I read it in Vietnames several times.

[boyhoangda]

let's show ;)) try to use English in this topic please :x

[ninhvechai]

My name's Ninh, I'm lonely, I want have girlfriend.

[Dê Siêng Năng]

My name's Ninh, I'm lonely, I want have girlfriend.
You want to have a girl friend :).
Wait until I complete my ass, I promise to contribute one of my essays :">. You should think in advance how great it is :binhsua07:

[boyhoangda]

what's wrong with your ass? Do you need a doctor?

[Dê Siêng Năng]

what's wrong with your ass? Do you need a doctor?
Oh my god :|. I mean assignment :|. You are trying to pose yourself as an innocent person, aren't you :|

[Dangerous]

what's wrong with your ass? Do you need a doctor?

Hey bro. You should ask: "Hey, do you need a gay? I can help u :">" =)) =))

[bongchay]

hi everyone .I'm being a member of noshy/ first , oh my god when i went noshy first time i felt it is interesting . I decided to take part in noshy club because i really wanted to improve my english so much. Last Sunday , we just had a trip to Bảo tàng dân tộc học .I don't know how to tránlate it in english . i think english is good . first reason , it is convinient for to apply to a job . Second english is international language . It have been becoming popular language. in the remote future, I want to go china in order work and study .But i want to go foreign country and explore many culture . after today i often to write comment in here . I hope everyone can check mistake for me and help me to improve my english thank you so much. I'm studying lv 3 in IBA so my sentences is simple . I expect everyone don't laught at me

[boyhoangda]

hi everyone .I'm being a member of noshy/ first , oh my god when i went (have joined) noshy (for the)first time i felt it is interesting . I decided to take part in noshy club because i really wanted (want) to improve my english . Last Sunday , we just had a trip to Bảo tàng dân tộc học (ethnic museum ).I don't know how to tránlate(translate - typing mistake) it in(to) english . i think english is good (important). first reason , it is convinient for to (to) apply to (for)a job . Second, english is (an) international language . It have been becoming (more)popular . in the remote (far) future, I want to go china (China) in order (to)work and study .But i (also)want to go (to other) foreign country (countries) and explore many culture . after today (since then)i (will) often to write comment in here . I hope (that) everyone can check mistake for me and help me to improve my english (.) thank you so much. I'm studying lv 3 in IBA so my sentences is (are) simple . I expect (that) everyone don't (won't) laught at me

Good try! Hope that you keep patient and try your best. No Shy's always beside you. I believe in your success. :wlc1:

[bongchay]

thank fot checking mistake for me boyhoangda .Tomorrow I will continue to write english comment before slot 2.

Tommorow is saturday .We will have midterm test , I have a little nervous . But i will review hard in order to pass it .Today i want to tALK ABOUT FPT univercity .My frist impression about here is googd. First it is good enviroment for us to grow up. secone I like the education in here . It is different from another school. We only study 3 subjects : vovinam, english , soft skills . Especially i like E so mucch .It will be điểm nổi trội than another school except some schools. third the staff is kind , well-trained , kind. My friend lost his wallet . But A women staff found it and gave it back for my friend . I think she is kind but she isn't beautiful hehe but i don't want talk about her beauty.I only want talk about her attitude with her work . She really is highly recommened to study . so It is enough for today because my english is limited

[antichi999]

thank fot checking mistake for me boyhoangda .Tomorrow I will continue to write english comment before slot 2

I'll try :)
" Thank for your helping me, boyhoangda. Tomorrow, by the time I begin slot 2, I will have written other English comment."

-> To express an action occur before another action in the future, we use the future perfect tense.

[boyhoangda]

I'll try :)
" Thank for your helping me, boyhoangda. Tomorrow, by the time I begin slot 2, I will have written other English comment."

-> To express an action occur before another action in the future, we use the future perfect tense.
thank you for helping me
thank for your help
thank for checking my mistake ....

[boyhoangda]

thank fot checking mistake for me boyhoangda .Tomorrow I will continue to write english comment before slot 2.

Tommorow is saturday .We will have midterm test , I have a little nervous . But i will review hard in order to pass it .Today i want to tALK ABOUT FPT univercity .My frist impression about here is googd. First it is good enviroment for us to grow up. secone I like the education in here . It is different from another school. We only study 3 subjects : vovinam, english , soft skills . Especially i like E so mucch .It will be điểm nổi trội (better) than another school except some schools. third the staff is kind , well-trained , kind. My friend lost his wallet . But A women staff found it and gave it back for my friend . I think she is kind but she isn't beautiful hehe but i don't want talk about her beauty.I only want talk about her attitude with her work . She really is highly recommened to study . so It is enough for today because my english is limited

Since then, I won't fix your mistakes directly. Instead of that, I will point your mistake out. Please rewrite by yourself. There are some common mistakes:
- in here : here only
- Capitalized word and typing mistakes: be careful with typing, it shows your attitude in
studying.
- list: the last couple are connected by "and".
- repeat: do not repeat the same word to much/ For example: ...gave it back for my friend . (him is better)
- tense: you should read again the book: "Grammar in use"
- Last , please never say: "my E is limited ". Do not threaten yourself. Let's say: My E is improving.

[bongchay]

Where can i find it ? But i want to have version What have both VNese and english thank you
Boy hoang da: I want to know What do you think about my english? Is it bad? I'm studying LV3 in IBA so . i need to change my lv from 3 to 1 or 2, don't you. When i read your comment . I really feel worry for my english oh my god

[Dê Siêng Năng]

Where can i find it (I can't see what you mean here)? But i (I) want to have version What have both VNese and english (a bilingual edition (Vietnamese & English languages). thank you
Boy hoang da: I want to ("would like" preferred if you want to ask a person of higher social position) know What do (remove it) you think about my english? Is it bad? I'm studying LV3 in IBA so i (I) need to change my lv from 3 to 1 or 2, don't you (don't I). When i read your comment . I really feel worry for ("worry about" only) my english. oh my god
I hope you can learn something from above mistakes :shock1:
Also, as boyhoangda told you, let's pay much more attention to your text typing. You'd better have a look at following tutorial.
http://kynangsong.xitrum.net/hocduong/196.html

[boyhoangda]

Oh, Don't worry too much!
@ Dê: He wants to know where he can find the book ;((

I bought the book in Pham Van Dong street ;)) the Vietnamese version :D